GunEagle (Ready For Inspection)

[GunEagle]

Name: GunEagle
Avatar Style: High-Speed Aerial Assault
Gender: Male
Appearance: Standby

User: Troy Langston

Personality: GunEagle was originally thought to be on default settings. Very formal and genuine. He has a strong sense for justice and his overall demeanor comes off very stoic. He's fairly quiet as he rarely ever speaks unless spoken to. He doesn't seem to take pleasure in anything he does.... Other than playing with bouncing balls that is. Big, small, red, blue, it doesn't matter. If it's spherical and bounces, he'll play with it while sitting down and repeatedly bouncing and catching the ball in a repetitive motion.... Nobody knows why. Despite all this, his personality shifts in combat when lives are at stake. He shows more emotion in the form of aggression. While it doesn't necessarily interfere with his tactical mind set,  it's clear that he takes endangering lives personally.


History: GunEagle's story begins in a secret development warehouse. A developer by the name of Jonathan Irons is developing a mass production line of state of the art Avatars for military uses. High speed units with flight capabilities that use experimental high powered rail guns. This line was called the Astral Knights. GunEagle, at the time referred to only as AKM#-01, was the first out of the 12 to be created. When the dozen units were put online, they were immediately put into the testing phase. For weeks the dozen AK avatars were locked in a hologram room that recreated artificial environments found in Cyber Earth.

If the avatars were to fail any artificial missions, the room's ceiling would open and a barrage of balls would fall down upon them, indicating that they failed. Which rarely ever happened. For reasons unknown, GunEagle began to question his existence, as they were left in the dark about what their purpose was. Something none of the other AK avatars did. However another avatar named AKM#-12 seemed to be the complete opposite. Never questioning it's existence, but always trying to find enjoyment out everything it did out side of combat. Such as playing with leafs, rocks, and just about anything it could find.

Over the course of several weeks, GunEagle would watch AKM#-12. As if he can't seem to understand why AKM#-12 found so much joy in all the little things around it, while GunEagle him self couldn't find any joy as he couldn't focus on anything but the next mission. However, dark days approached as Mr.Irons' bosses canceled his fundings and terminated his operations due to various fraud charges he may or may not be guilty of. Before the corporation he worked for could erase him off the books, Mr.Irons set up an illegal auction for wealthy investors to make bids on each of the Astral Knights.

After setting up a live video conference with roughly 20 investors itching to grab an Astral knight, he set up one of the most difficult training missions available to showcase their talents. A mission the Astral Knights completed hundreds of times. The mission was to destroy all incoming missiles before they hit the base. The mission went as planned, until AKM#-12 deviated from the group. The Astral Knights panicked as their formation was now thrown of course. All while AKM#-12 played with a sea shell it found on the ground. The Astral Knights tried their best to retake control, but it was futile. One of the missiles hit the base. The room reverted back to it's base settings and balls fell from the ceiling. All the Astral Knights formed a circle around AKM#-12, staring in disappointment. With a smile on it's face, AKM#-12 took the balls one by one and playfully threw them at everyone. The Astral knights were not phased by AKM#-12 antics..... Except for GunEagle.

GunEagle caught one of the balls, and threw it back. AKM#-12 caught it and was super ecstatic about it and bounce passed it back to GunEagle. GunEagle caught it, and for the first time in his life he actually felt something. He felt joy. As if In this very instance, GunEagle finally understood AKM#-12. GunEagle bounce passed it to AKM#-12 with a smile on his face. AKM#-12 catches the ball with an even bigger smile than before and bounce passes it to GunEagle. GunEagle starts laughing as he catches then bounce passes the ball back to AKM#-12. Back and forth they would bounce the ball to each other for several minutes. The wealthy investors nearly die with laughter at such a pathetic display from these so called military grade avatars. One by one the investors would cancel their video feed. Mr.Irons was embarrassed and grew incredibly furious with this turn of events and threw a tantrum. Irons then grabbed his keyboard and began deleting the Astral Knights for good. One after another the Astral Knights were being deleted as GunEagle and AKM#-12 looked in horror. The 2 avatars would then look at each other as they realize what was about to happen. AKM#-12 immediately put up a smile and bounced the ball towards GunEagle. He catches the ball and looks back at AKM#-12. Before he could bounce the ball back, The only friend he's ever had dematerializes before his eyes... GunEagle is then fueled by rage, throws the ball upwards and unloads every bullet from his Digit Guns; aimlessly shooting in every direction. Then suddenly GunEagle's vision fades to black and goes offline.

GunEagle wakes up, to his surprise, in a training facility at a Nets Op HQ. He checks the calendar and discovers that 3 months have passed since he was last online. He overhears a man named Troy Langston and his supervisor debate on whether it is a good idea for Troy to use an unregistered avatar like GunEagle for Law enforcement. GunEagle then politely interrupts them, completely shocking them as they nearly fall off their feet. GunEagle salutes, and beings telling them his model number and his various functions. Before he could finish, he notices a ball at the corner of his eye. He immediately walks towards it and starts playing with it. Troy notices the odd nature of this avatar. Very serious one minute, then suddenly starts playing with balls out of nowhere. He can't help but to be curious about this avatar. Over the next few days Troy and GunEagle get to know each other and grow to really like one another. So much that they decided to be partners.

**What happened after GunEagle blacked out in the secret warehouse with Mr.Irons will be revealed in the Troy Langston bio.**


Add-Ons:

- Digit Guns: Each of GunEagle's fingers can operate like pistols when straighten. 4 on each hand, 8 in total. The thumbs serve as a reloading mechanism that has to be pulled back once all the magazines are empty. These guns do a moderate level of damage, they're semi-automatic and fire 9mm rounds. Although they may give off the appearance of fully automatic guns as they can be fired independently from each other. Digit Guns can be used in any mode.
(!0 shots per post, 12 shots each before needing reload)

- Heat Fins: Heat Fins are the long golden colored fins on GunEagle's back. They can also be used as Ninjato shaped swords. Although they don't have the finest of sharp edges, the real damage comes from the intense heat they radiate. Once activated it allows them to cut objects just about as well as any beam sword on the market could. Heat Fins can only be hand wielded in it's default mode.

- Connectivity: Flight Mode: 
This is GunEagle's primary way of traveling. GunEagle will hover and then lean forward to become parallel to the ground. Simultaneously the outer portion of the wings will pop up, while the beak shield on his chest will rise over GunEagle's head, giving him a jet powered bird appearence. This mode is for both traveling and combat purposes. It's speed and overall aerial mobility is increased significantly by 100%. In this mode, GunEagle's boots allow him to hover in place and are also used for emergency brakes. It has all the capabilities of the Standby mode. With the differences being the Heat Fins can't be hand wielded in this mode, although the Heat Fins can still be utilized by using some clever flying techniques. The Beak shield serves as a sort of battering ram. Allowing GunEagle to purposely collide with enemies or various surfaces with pinpoint precision. Finally, the Rail Cannons can only be fired at a highly reduced output.


Downloaded Programs:

- Rail Cannons: "RC's" are the most lethal weapons in GunEagle's arsenal. Stored at the top of each wing, these cannons fire super powered blasts of energy. They're concussive and deliver a very devastating impact. The blasts are made up of scattered data that are molded and compressed to a near liquid state, and held together by electromagnetic particles provided by the Rail Cannons. When fired forward on even ground, the electromagnetic particles weaken very quickly as the shot loses momentum, it eventually dissipates after traveling for nearly 150 yards. When fired at a downward angle from above, the range doubles as the stability of the shot isn't weakened by opposing gravity. But the output is cut to about half if he's hovering. When fired upward the range is cut in half. Each shot is about a 1/2 yard wide, 20 yards long. In Flight mode, because most it's power is used for the thrusters, the Rail Cannons fire at only 1/4th of the max output.
(1 post charge, 6 post cool down, 3 times per battle)

- DG Upgrade: GunEagle's Digit Guns are upgraded to armor piercing rounds, temporarily replacing the normal rounds.
(2 post duration, 3 post cool down)

- Micro Missiles: These are tiny missiles. They have a range of 200 yards and a blast radius of 15 meters. 4 of them are located in GunEagle's head, underneath his visor. The remaining 8 are located in compartments on the back of the G-Booster's wings, 4 on each wing.
(2 post cool down, 12 missiles per battle)

- Eagle Eye: When his visor rolls down in front of his head, he's able to see through the red spherical camera located on the top of his head. This allows him to zoom in on far away objects from a mile away; read data signatures and the public profiles of Avatars in his vicinity, and allows him to target and track fast moving objects. Although he can track fast moving targets, he still has to rely on his own marksmanship skills to actually hit his target. 
(3 post duration, 4 post cool down)

[Saber]

Well, I can tell this one's going to require a lot of back and forth, only cuz of how much is in it. I'll try to focus on bits and pieces, since this is a pretty well detailed profile. You'll have to forgive me if I get a bit critical in my critique here.

First off, the appearance versus the standard mode: What is the significance for this? I understand the main appearance has the guns hovering overhead, but why a picture for standard mode if it's his normal walk around appearance like the first pic (which are also a bit heavy on the post size, a simple URL link would have worked just as well if you wanted to do that. It'd also make for an easier read of the profile).

Second: These modes, are they all part of a single program? Because if not, you appear to be passing the limit for the amount of built in add-ons an avatar can have in its base code.

I'm also a bit curious about the connectivity segment of the modes. The program categorization system I designed solely listed programs for only one of three options; combat, connectivity, and cosmetic. You'll have to elaborate a little bit on what these modes are supposed to be categorized under. Say, for instance, flight mode is connectivity, since it proves for better mobility, while still being an effective combat mode. Standard mode would be just that, a standard, non-categorized mode for interacting with non-hostiles. and Standby mode would be combat specific, since it's meant for fighting. Basically, the categorization is combat=primarily weapon usage, connectivity=primarily vehicle and fast traveling usage, and cosmetic=primarily appearance change, there isn't really a mix between the three

Another thing is the functions of the modes, you've listed specific program names inside of the modes. Am I right in assuming each mode uses a specific set of programs? Because if so, and if GunEagle is an avatar stored on a terminal, he would only be able to use 2 programs, due to a physical memory limit. Then again, you may just be referencing one DP per mode, I haven't looked too carefully at the entire profile quite yet.

Again, I'm sorry if I'm being critical of my review, but some of the details in this are a bit confusing...At least for me. Once you've explained the modes a bit more, I'll make my way down to the add ons and download programs.

[GunEagle]

 Thanks for the response, Saber. My intentions are not to deviate from the rules and get special treatment. So if you have to tie me down and beat me with a crowbar until everything is up to par, then so be it! Though I doubt that will be necessary. 

 The idea behind Standard mode is practicality. The G-Booster's wings stretch out over his shoulders. They're not the kind that flap and fold inward. Standard mode allows him to walk around with out accidentally knocking things over or having to walk sideways through door ways. I wanted to be as thorough as possible.

 To answer your second question, all the modes are part of a single program. Though I can see why you had to ask. I made it more clear this time.

 I'm actually glad you broke down the categorization system for me, because I was definitely confused at first. I wanted to show the difference in speed between each mode. But I honestly felt the way I had did it made it seem like I was trying to godmod him into being super fast in every mode; though I only wanted to measure their connectivity in comparison to each other, not other avatars. But clearly I didn't know how to go about doing it. Looking back at it all, I feel it doesn't actually matter anyway because Flight mode's speed is the one that matters in the end.

 As for the function of the modes, all modes use the same programs. I do have a question though. Flight mode is the connectivity mode, like you suggested. But for Standard and Standby, they're both combat oriented. Is this ok? I know it probably seems weird that i'm making an inferior combat mode that has zero benefits over the default mode, or either modes really. But I feel that even in fiction common sense is needed. Which goes back to what I was saying about the practicality of Standard mode.

 Don't worry about being critical, at least when it comes to me that is. I know this is all about being fair and that it is important to understand exactly what every character is capable of.

[Saber]

If you have a mode that has no real significance, or is just a minor change to the default form normally used by the avatar, it isn't necessary to keep it in there cuz it'll take up extra space. Also, since standby mode is basically the default appearance, you don't really need two links for the dame appearance (I like the first one though, linking for the appearance). I'd have no problem just with flight mode being the extra program that needs details, standby mode is basically just walk and talk mode from what I can tell, it doesn't need an explanation, really. What I'm saying is you don't have to have the G-boosters hidden, it's not necessary (I've found that for some things, going with the K.I.S.S. theory works just fine rather than bother with excessive details).

Going back to the K.I.S.S. Theory, the flight program (if you go with only standby and flight as interchangeable modes) should only really need to be its own feature, but that's your choice. I would recommend mentioning where the programs in each mode's details can be found on the profile, just so if anyone else reads the profile, they'll know where to look if they're not sure about details in the program.

And just because Flight mode is connectivity focused, just because of how this character is set up, I'm fine with making an exception with the whole categorization system for it managing both combat AND connectivity, since he IS the vehicle and all. I'll be sure to reread the thread for the categorization and clarify anything that's confusing, thanks for the comment.

And thanks for being understanding about the critiquing, I'm guessing you've been around a bit in the RPing game?

[GunEagle]

 Yea, I've been doing this for quite a while. But only on specific sites. It's very easy to become bias of your own writing, and be blind to it's flaws. This is why every major form of story telling, like movies and TV, have writing teams. Lots of RPers don't realize that criticism is a writing fundamental. I've seen a lot of useless animosity on plenty of RP sites for this very reason. But anyway, I took your suggestion and made the flight mode it's own feature. In the end it's the only one that really needs explaining as the rest was just fluff I suppose.

[Saber]

Works for me. Well, on to the critique again.

Heat fins: I noticed you mention any modes in this still, even though the only mode he has other than his standby mode is flight, might need to proofread this one. Aside form that, these are fine, I'm assuming that they work in flight ode as well, but he would have to do fly by attacks? Or is it only a melee weapon in standby?

Flight Mode: I'm assuming the beak shield is exclusive to this mode, explaining why it has no section of its own.

Rail Cannon: Only really effective in standby mode from how I'm reading it? So, let me understand the attacks clearly; if it shoots into the ground, the particles can keep traveling, but lose momentum and power. And in in the air (either standby or flight mode) the power and damage is greatly decreased because of the power needed to sustain flight. Did I miss anything?

Aside form that, I'm not seeing a lot of other issues that need clarifying.

[GunEagle]

Yea, fly by attacks is the only way to use the Heat fins in Flight mode. Seems like you have the Rail Cannons down pat as well. The beak shield is just standby's normal chest wear, and is only weaponized in Flight mode.

[Saber]

Well, aside form that, I'm not seeing anything game breaking for this. As far as I'm concerned, GunEagle is approved!